Bullets
Blood
Bodies
Nowhere else is it like this
Where hell meets Earth
Where the devil will grab you
Control you
Turn you into his puppet
Force you to kill your fellow man
And as dead bodies
Soldiers are no different
They are all just soulless pieces of flesh
Never to walk the earth again
Cursed to eternal damnation
For their loved ones
The agony of death will haunt them
For the person that they cherish most
Has been consumed by the devil
They are the ones that played the devil’s game
And lost
War is pointless murder
For when one man falls
Another will take his place
Prepared to die
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6 comments:
A Little gory but nothing you can't fix good job Adam. I like the detail and structure of the poem :)
The two poems are very good but maybe you should attach your lines better
-Luke Stein
Hey i like ur poems alot but there is one thing i think you could change a little... i think u could change up the temagami poem a bit becasue u r just listing a bunch of thing i think you could go into more detail.
scott
Adam that is a good poem it has lots of descripition and you really have a good sight of war
Its very old skewl and deep
like the atl;antic ocean
from reid
Nice job right now. I really liked the lines where you compare war with hell. It really would describe what it would feel like in the war. Only a few criticisms.
OK. So the poem's great. Done. All you should do is cut up your long lines. It may seem choppy, but it's fine. It'll just put boom, boom!s. That's it.
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