Dog Sledding
Wake up!
Eyes open
A tired boy crawls out of a sleeping bag
He’s ready
After getting dressed he stumbles outside
The cold stings his toes but he does not mind
The warmth of the trail will keep him going
Finally, after what seems like an eternity
The open trail lies ahead
The dogs are frantic
Their excited yelps echo through thought the forest
Ready…
Go!
The dogs shoot forward onto the trail
If they had the option, they would never stop
They would keep going until their legs broke
But they had to stop eventually
Easy…
Whoa
A man walks down the aisle of sleds
He’s handing out bagels
As the boy receives a bagel, one off his dogs jump on him
He asks, “Can I have some?”
The dogs race forward again
Paw after paw
Leaving an imprint in the snow
The lesson here:
It doesn’t matter
Whether you Gi
Or Haw
Your job is to enjoy the ride
That’s all that matters
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2 comments:
Adam Great Poem
I really enjoyed reading it
Adam at the beginning it states "Wake up!" and Than "Eye's open" I would change those around or put them on the same line.
Adam i think that you could get rid of the line that says "he's ready," i don't think it slows the poem down a bit.
Adam i dont quite understand the sandwich /dog jumping on person part... i think you could make it a little clearer, to tell us who is talking the dog or the guy?
I think at the end you could put "Whether you gi," and "Or Haw," on the same line...
Essery
Adam
i think this is an amazing poem even though i didnt go it gives me a sense on what the trip was like maybe try to make it rhyme a little more and a little longer sentences.
And like sam said maybe switch wake up/eyes open around.
But i really liked it good job
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